Could someone take a look at my resume? (I need some advice plus I have questions)

[1eo]

Greetings,

 

I just graduate with a b. arch and I'm looking for a job .

 

Now, I don't want to blow my opportunity of working close home because of a badly presented resume and I was hoping you guys could give me some tips.

 

I don't have much experience in the field so I need to make it up some how

 

Anyway, here is my resume in a PDF format:

Edit=, Second Draft:

http://www.tereschubert.com/art/extra/ResumeSchubertLeonardo2.pdf

 

 

 

In the OBJECTIVE... is going right to the point good?

 

EDUCATION: Should I mention my GPA? (it's 3.04)

Should I mention I did two semesters in a "Technical college" (3.68 GPA)?

 

SKILLS: Should I mention I'm a porfessional photographer?

 

Thanks a lot!

Leonardo

BTW, here is a PDF presentation of my thesis

and my website

[mwhite]

Leonardo:

 

Based on the content of your resume it looks like you are off to a good start.

However, I would ideally have someone who is familiar with resumes (at your school perhaps) look at it for wording/spelling and also formatting.

 

In my opinion it is hard to read visually and the formatting/fonts needs work. If there is no one to look at your resume who is a professional/experienced I would try to use some of the microsoft word templates and follow their fonts and formatting.

 

Good luck!

[karl zacharias]

I review a lot of resumes..the GPA I would loose, if it was Cum Laude or such I would mention it...you also might try a resume counselor, when I graduated (years ago)..I employeed one and even thou it was $500.00 it paid off...I'm still getting calls. Futhermore, a resume con. will be able to give you firms for your mass mailing. Plan on interviewing alot...12-24 firms for first interview and 6-12 for second is not uncommon...good luck to ya

[Continuumx]

Hello 1eo,

 

I wrote you back a response over at http://www.maxwellrender.com forum.

[angelo]

Leonardo,

 

Looks good so far…

 

I would put the list of the software titles at the bottom under a skills heading. A potential employer might want to know what software you are proficient in, but more importantly, what you can do with it. Try a paragraph or two explaining the types of projects/models you've built and the challenges/solutions you came up with.

 

Even if these projects were for school or for fun, it's still experience!

 

Good luck,

Angelo

[1eo]

OKay here's a second draft

 

http://www.tereschubert.com/art/extra/ResumeSchubertLeonardo2.pdf

[alekzab]

to be honest with you i dont like your font text layout and the border around it. you have very good experience in the resume but i would splash some color on it so that its is compatble as a web page as well.

other than great job!

[AJLynn]

My advice:

 

Change to an email address that's just some form of your name, it's more professional. If Temple has an alum email forwarding service (e.g. lschubert@alum.temple.edu) use that - it's permanent, professional and whenever somebody looks at it they know you went to a good school.

 

Lose the Objective and tell them what kind of job you want in the cover letter, where you can say more. Also, I'd stay away from phrasings like "entry level". Different firms use different words for the position you're looking for - I just went through this and had "intern architect" and "graduate architect" offers but ended up as a "junior architect" - and if you can identify the term the firm uses, you can use that, otherwise stick with "intern architect".

 

In the education section, change spelling of "lab", delete "building" from that line and lose the GPA line. Lose the (2000-2005) line and only put in the year you got your degree. Don't mention the technical college unless you got a degree or certificate that would be impressive - emphasize the professional program.

 

Under experience and skills, rephrase the opening to something like this: "Proficient in drafting, 3D modeling and visualization and web design. Experienced in complex modeling in a fast-paced environment." (Resumes are about you, you don't need words like "I".) Then put in a line like "Extensive computer experience in several technologies, including:" and condense Rhino, MAYA, Maxwell, Cinema4D and FormZ into one line with a heading like "Visualization packages:". Don't InterCap Photoshop.

 

Your Employment section is the most impressive part - most people coming out of school haven't headed anything, let alone production on a tight deadline. Do you have more of this that you can put in, with the space you'd save by condensing the lines on software and dropping the GPA? Employers care more about experience than an impressive list of software. Action words and anything with an impressive result or that shows an ability to get stuff done is good.

[alexg]

The way you write your computer skills are a bit too redundant for me.

I will try to remove the description of the softwares. If your prospective employer would want to hire you for C4d, they will already have good idea of what C4d can do. Better put your proficiency with the softwares, such as:

-Autocad : Expert in advanced 3d modelling, good 2d drafting skills. That will show more of what you are rather than the softwares.

 

Another thing that I pick up is there's a degree of inconsistency between lengthy explanatory paragraphs on some item and just simple bulleted list in others. Resume always looks better with a more consistent layout structure.

 

If you are really confident, I will add an image of your most impressive render (or photograph) as a signature or letter banner.

Or instead of writing, put thumbnails under each of your work experiences, that will really say it all. We are in creative industry here, so showing what you can do is much more appreciated than writing it.

[AJLynn]

Pairing a sample sheet with a resume is pretty common, especially for recent grads. With sufficiently thick 2-sided inkjet paper you can use one side for resume and the other for samples.

[mskin]

Appearance:

 

I think its too much to be honest, remember to "keep it simple stupid"... I don't like the side banner at all, I think it is distracting. Remember, not every resume gets read and the first cut is often based on visual appearance - with total disregard for the content. I think your resume shouldn't be as "loud" and should be easier to look at.

 

Content:

 

First items that stick out (and don't call me a hypocrite because this is a freaking web forum) is misspelling, grammar and punctuation - "I have proficient" to "I am proficient", "lap" should be "lab", under employment the sentence beginning with "working with a very tight...." is an incomplete sentence.

 

Also, inconsistencies in the way you describe your accomplishments... in one declaration "headed up digital production" and in the next "I was able..". All statement should be stated consistently and I agree - avoid using "I did" but rather state the accomplishment - "headed up digital production". Instead of "I received...", "Received..."

 

Be concise.... bust your nuts searching for the simplest, least "wordy" way to state your accomplishments. Don't make this a "Progressive Architect" read, but more of a "People Magazine" read.... to the point (I guess that doesn't make sense, does people ever have a point?). Believe me.... people will get bored with wordy sentences. I almost think that your computer graphics paragraph could be simplified to "I have extensive working knowledge of...." list the programs - less narrative and more concise.

 

I think your objective is cliché.... I don't think it will really hurt you, but it certainly wont help you.... be a bit creative, but not too creative.

 

Could you possible omit the entire "Skills and experience" section and incorporate those items into "work experience" .

 

For instance:

 

Employment

 

STUDIO POSSENATO (ARCHITECTURAL FIRM) – Solopaca, Italy;

Directed digital production for Hospital Licitation, a new _____sf facility for the city of Naples. Using AutoCAD, Rhinoceros 3d, ETC to produce exterior and interior renderings, as well as animated walk through.

 

Created Multimedia flash presentation using Macromedia, Photoshop….

 

Tere Schubert Photography Inc. ….

Received “Presidents Award, ….”

Photographed for …. (catalogue)

Photographed for …. (publication)

Gained experience with digital and film photography.

 

Leonardo,

I think your experience and accomplishments are very impressive, but you need to take great care in your resume - be as detailed oriented as you can possibly be. Have a friend (preferably an English major) review it.

 

Good luck