jafs00 Posted July 12, 2007 Share Posted July 12, 2007 Here's a night shot and a day shot of the same building, the client is satisfied with the night shot, but isn't quite crazy about the day shot, I felt something was off on the day shot as well, but can't quite put my finger to it, please critique so I can improve it... thanks a lot guys and gals night day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crazy Homeless Guy Posted July 12, 2007 Share Posted July 12, 2007 you need to figure out how to make the lower 2 levels more inviting in the day shot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tommy L Posted July 12, 2007 Share Posted July 12, 2007 Maybe the glass need some articulation. A touch more transparency and some action inside maybe. I think the building maybe needs a little more 'room to breathe' in the image. But if this is the only photo you have to comp, thats by the by. Nice images by the way. At some point, somebody here will tell you to correct the verticals. My opinion however, is that the 3rd perspective works well in this shot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neko Posted July 12, 2007 Share Posted July 12, 2007 i like the slightly abstract look of the night shot a bit better. what happened to the foreground tree though ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrianKitts Posted July 12, 2007 Share Posted July 12, 2007 I'd get rid of the mcdonalds logo in the day shot glass reflection. The foreground tree is missing in the night shot... if you darken it down it will help to frame up the picture just like the day shot. Compositionally you may want to offset the building to the right a bit, with it dead center and adding the foreground tree the image gets weighted to the left too much. possibly something more like this..... I accidentally chopped to much of the bottom off.... but the idea is there... (sorry Tommy...couldn't resist the verts!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
djoshi Posted July 13, 2007 Share Posted July 13, 2007 Yes, Tommy is right show some activity & lights inside in day view, especially at lower levels..! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deevee84 Posted July 17, 2007 Share Posted July 17, 2007 what program is this done in? i like the abstract look to ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RTurner Posted July 17, 2007 Share Posted July 17, 2007 The girl in the day shot looks like she just put her dog to sleep......this may be part of the objection. Focus more on the entry and develop a better story with your peeps. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mat@MDI-Digital Posted July 17, 2007 Share Posted July 17, 2007 adding some post glow would help alot I think Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jafs00 Posted July 18, 2007 Author Share Posted July 18, 2007 wow, thanks for the suggestions guys...I sorta got tied up on other projects and couldn't reply as quickly as I would like to, so as soon as I get back to work on this project, I'll post some updates travis: do you think maybe if i added some inside illumination it would work? I thought about that but came to the conclusion that it would seem somewhat artificial during the daytime, whats your opinion Tom: you're right about the glass needing articulation, gonna do that in the lower levels, and you're right about it being the only pic I have to comp. Paul: thanks, I wasn't going for the abstract look though . forgot to comp in the tree in the night shot Brian: I tried the verticals before, but they didn't look as well as your image, thanks for the example, I'm gonna trya ltering the composition a bit. Darshit: gonna try out the suggestions, and post another image when i get around to this project again. David: the abstract look was unintentional , It's done in 3dmax v.8 + Vray Rob: thanks for the suggestions, serious girl makes for a serious image, dont you think? Mathew: I added some post glow in the night shot, you think it needs more? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jafs00 Posted July 27, 2007 Author Share Posted July 27, 2007 finally got around on updating this project, and thanks to you guys I hope it looks better, I corrected the distortion a bit, and the client wanted me to try with an orange sky, I replaced the sullen lloking girl with a person I hope most of you people enjoy! thanks for the tips and please point me out on ways I can still better these images! DAY NIGHT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
erickdt Posted July 27, 2007 Share Posted July 27, 2007 I would definately take Michael Jackson out of the day shot. If you feel that you absolutely must use him I would suggest using the "Thriller" era Michael Jackson and not the modern "Pedophile" era Michael Jackson. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tommy L Posted July 27, 2007 Share Posted July 27, 2007 I would maybe go right back to 'Off the Wall' era. Least contentious as he still atually looks african american and less like an alien. Mind you, putting him in an image probably enhances the realism of the image, just by comparison. You know, like, can you spot whats not natural looking about this render? I guess your rendr looks more like a real building than wacko looks like a real person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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