House Exterior

[jameson101]

Hey all,

 

It has been awhile since I last posted something so I thought I should show you guys/girls what I have been working on.

This house still has alot work that needs to be done and the architect has not specified what most of the materials are.

I hope you like it and hope to hear some helpful feedback.

 

Many thanks.

[mare96]

nice try...

 

need to work:

1.aluminum door - not symmetric

2.poolwater - opacity, caustics, not so blue

3.camera angle - more wide view

 

my advice: observe real life, real colours... :-)

 

bye

[parker2740]

I would suggest working on the reflections of the windows. The ground floor window reflects clouds and sky but given the level it would most likely reflect the chir in the foreground as well as geometry,(enclosing wall, etc) instead. The water is REALLY wavy too.

[Kyle]

The materials need a little work, the tiles around the pool should be a litttle glossier, the water a little more transparent. The plant in the foreground looks like you have photoshopped it in. I agree with previous comments about the camera angle maybe should be a little wider. If you work on the composition and the materials I think it has the making of a nice image.

[kstruve]

One of my art teachers used to ask me, "What's your point?" He didn't mean to sound rude or confrontational, he just wanted me to explain what he should be looking at in the image, because I hadn't made it clear yet. I hadn't set up a composition that led the eye to anything in particular - no focal point or "pay off."

 

Well that is the first thing I thought of with your rendering. Am I supposed to be looking at the parasol pole that bisects the composition? Or is it the water, or the chair, or the window, or the seating in the background? I encourage you to decide what the most important aspect of the image is and lead us to it.

 

Suggestions:

1. Move the pole in the foreground to one side or the other, but move it out of the center. That splits your image in two.

2. Move the foreground chair to the left so that it begins to frame your composition.

3. The palm tree looks underdeveloped and a little fake. Consider getting rid of it.

4. People! I would add a person reclining on the foreground chair looking toward the seating area in the distance. Then add a bunch of people and activity at that table and make it the focal point.

 

It's looking good, but it needs some redirection and some other small moves to make it more interesting.

 

Kurt

[jameson101]

I really appreciate your comments, I hope that I can learn for it and just make awsome work, just give me time.

 

mare96: I know I gota work on my materials more, I feel so lazy in that part of the work.

 

parker2740: My render didnt make any reflection so just decided to do a quick reflection in photoshop but I think I made it worse.

 

Kyle: Thanks kyle i will work on them

 

kstruve: You are so so right, why arent you my teacher! haha, I studied 3DS max by I did more self study and had to learn Vray from scratch. Your comments are very helpful I will get to work on them and hope to make this house as good as I can. I will put more images of the house when I can and hope you can comment.

 

Thanks all, learning from mistakes can only be for good