Need help with web translation

[pablo scapi]

Helo:

 

I have recently made my web promoting my services (basically here in spain) but i wanted also to have an inglish version of it, since is the most universal language.

 

So i translate my web to inglish, but i´m not so sure if i did it right.

 

Could you check it for me and tell me where i had mistaken.

 

Thank you in advance

 

btw thw link is in my signature

 

Pablo

[IC]

Hi Pablo,

I had a look and I've listed below what I'd change:

 

Enterprise

 

Change 'Besides of' to 'at the same time as',

'and useful tool'.....'during the design period',

'A thousand words',

'to transcend',

'spaces',

'evoke' not 'evocate',

'viewer's'.

I'd be tempted to leave out the last paragraph but if you'd rather not, you could change it to:

'The small investment in our service can become a big profit when, for example, the customer can imagine himself in his future house'.

 

Service

 

'Techniques',

'process' not 'elaboration',

'infinite',

'following'.

 

I'd also run a spell check if you have one.

 

If any of this isn't clear, let me know.

 

By the way, I thought your site was a bit heavy on text and light on images but all of the above is just my opinion.

[Bill L]

Helo:

 

I have recently made my web promoting my services (basically here in spain) but i wanted also to have an inglish version of it, since is the most universal language.

 

So i translate my web to inglish, but i´m not so sure if i did it right.

 

Could you check it for me and tell me where i had mistaken.

 

Thank you in advance

 

btw thw link is in my signature

 

Pablo

I think it looks very good. It's well made. Easy to use. Very readable.

 

Bill L