first model for critique!

[troypackham]

Studio/Institution: wigwam
Genre: Retail Exterior
Software: 3ds max vray cs2
Website: http://troypackhamportfolio.carbonmade.com
Description:

Hi this is my first model/render, I am looking for as much feedback as possible on the image/ model as how to develop.

I am a recent architecture part 1 graduate and looking to specialise into 3D visualisation. (currently self-teaching).

 

Thanks in advance, Troy.

[peterletten]

The composition needs a lot of work. The furniture in the foreground is shutting the shot down. Try ditch the two chairs on the front right and rotate the white chair, (front left) so its more open to the viewer and makes the shot more welcoming.

 

Theres some scale issues, the bricks on the path look too big, and the birds look too big to me.

 

You could have more drama in the sky.

 

And I think you need to bring your plant greens together - the hues are too mixed/far apart, doesnt look very natural too me.

 

I'd try get some direct light to hit the furniture in the foregound to give this part of the shot more interest and to contrast the pink tinge you're getting everywhere.

 

Theres some weird texture/lighting issues going on to - like the black potplant.. and the dark wall top right is distracting.

 

But for your first effort, it shows promise. Biggest comments would be work on your composition and textures.

Hope this helps.

[RyderSK]

I don't like these threads, they don't do any justice to original poster.

 

It always go like this, for thousandth time: Very bad and chaotic picture gets posted ( no one please piss their pants, I chose very calm language this time for sake of over-sensitivness of this forum ) and peple post advice in manner : "Well, change A to Z, but honestly, NICE start !"

 

Well, no. This is mess, and you won't correct it into good image even if you would change piece by piece for even months.

 

Don't over-sweat self-learning. Even self-learning needs order and outside mentoring first, not second ! It's 2013 and hundreds of EXCELLENT tutorials covering every aspect of archviz is on market. Follow those first. No one starts with blank canvas unless they already know pretty well of what they're capable of.

 

Some good commercial "Make it all ground-up" type tutorials are : Evermotion Archviz DVD, Viscorbel scenes (this guys has excellent english and literally, doesn't skip anything, no click at all, so it's like watching him work).

 

Free ones: Any longer making-off on Ronen Bekerman's website ( I can specially advice the ones from Bertrand Benoit for high-end sake, of Ludvik Koutny's 3-part series on Luis Kahn's house, these are very detailed, and show not just technical advice, but also philosophy and thoughts behind work.

 

Within 2 weeks timeframe, it's possible to read everything on Ronen's site, every single tutorial. And it's worth it, it will give you incredible know-how, inspiration on what's possible and what level you should attain as quickly as possible because well, competition is just big :- ).

 

Please don't get discouraged, I try to help people very honestly and in biggger picture and I honestly believe, pinpointing mistakes in horrible work would not help you, after all, you passed architecture edu, so you should be able to withstand anything pretty much by now.

 

Good luck.

[sergiocaparelli]

hey, for a first render it looks really good. my first renders looked very much like a mount of crap (well.. they still look kind of)

 

At the instant you see the image you can see something is wrong, like there is too much things put together, like the image lacks some sense of depth. Maybe it´s scaling issues. When you work too hard on an image sometimes put too much work on finer details and lost track of the "big picture".

but like i said, its great for a first render.

[meherthakker]

nice render..keep up the good work mate !!